Arabella has gotten Vivi out of her mansion and successfully taken her to her cabin in the woods. So, right now, Vivi and I are exploring Arabella’s home, and it seems to be rather normal–even with a washing machine in the basement and marble counter tops. But she refused to answer Vivienne’s questions in the car on the way over, and she generates a lot of heat when she touches Vivienne. Just stroking her chin, touching her hand or arm, and kissing her hand is enough to create real heat “like a hand inside a thick glove late on a December evening.”
I also noticed a lot of passive writing in this last passage. Was, were, and had keep popping up in my writing, and it will
probably need to be addressed when I start editing. Hopefully, it isn’t too prominent in the writing before now; I guess I just kept noticing it when Vivi was describing stuff second-hand. Like her interactions with Arabella, how things looked and felt. Rather than just having her state it, I need to have her experience it. That’s the essence of showing versus telling–reading versus experiencing.
I’m already over 9,000 words for this story, and when I began considering the short story option for this years NaNo challenge, I was expecting maybe 10,000 per story. Well, Colleen came up much shorter than that, but hers was firsthand and she wasn’t interacting with a group of girls–just one and the doctor. There was so much Colleen didn’t know, versus Vivienne’s firsthand account as an eye-witness who has all the information about this situation. And she’s producing mountains of details.
I wrote 1,963 words today, keeping my daily word average over 1800, and I’m making my way towards NaNo’s next word count badge: 25,000. Thankfully, I’m beyond Day 14’s word count, and I’ll hit Day 15’s goal tomorrow as long as I’m able to write.
How are all of you doing so far?
Total Word Count, so far: 24,246/50,000